Majd Kazzaz
04/26/15
PB2B
When
reading different pieces of literature by different authors, one may be able to
notice a difference in the way things are presented or structured. This is
mostly due to the fact that every writer has his or her own “moves”. The term moves is a very broad term that can be
used to identify a multiple of elements. It can be used to describe the diction
a writer uses, the sentence structure, the figurative language, the schemes,
and many more. Every writer’s moves are what make that writer unique and
distinguishable from the others. While some writers may use some of the same
individual moves, they might combine different moves to make the writing even
more unique. This can be seen in Janet Boyd’s “Murder! (Rhetorically Speaking)”
and in Laura Bolin Carroll’s “Backpacks vs Briefcases”.
Janet Boyd
implements a combination of unique moves that are not often seen in other
pieces of writing. One particular element that I noticed in her piece I that
she is extremely conversational and personal in her writing. It is almost to
the point where you feel like you might as well be sitting in a coffee shop
across the table from her. She floods her paper with uses of the words “I” and
“You” in order to create a mood of personal connection. Now one might wonder
why Boyd chooses to use this mood, rather than implement an academic tone that
would be taken much more seriously. My interpretation led me to believe that
she chooses this sort of personal and conversational style in order to strengthen
her message and make sure the reader understands what she is attempting to
portray. Say perhaps that she chose to barrage the paper with long academic
words and a very serious mood; then most of the readers would find themselves
lost like a tourist in a foreign country without a map. Another move that Boyd
chooses to implement in her writing is the use of questions to get the reader
thinking. These rhetorical questions allow for a different way of approaching
the reader with new information. Rather than her just throwing information at
the reader and hoping that the reader catches something, she puts these
questions to get the reader more involved. Speaking of getting the reader more
involved, that is something that she does constantly throughout the article.
Whether it be her saying, “Take a moment to visualize the five facts” or
“Really—go, write, and come back” she takes command of the information and
encourages the reader to apply what they are learning. By doing this, she tells
the reader to take a moment and step away from the text in order to apply some
of the concepts and get an even better understanding. Another move of hers,
even though it is minor, is her use of italicized words throughout the paper.
She does this in order to emphasize certain concepts and to point out the main
ideas of a particular paragraph.
After
analyzing all the moves that Boyd included in her piece, it was time to look at
Laura Bolin Carroll’s “Backpacks vs. Briefcases” to determine some similarities
and differences. Right off the bat the first thing I noticed is that this piece
of writing is more formal and less personal than the other. While it does
include some personal pronouns throughout the text, it is not nearly as much as
Boyd had in her piece. Even though this might seem like a minor contrast
between the two, it ends up creating a completely different mood and effect in
both of the pieces. One move that Carroll does, and that Boyd also implements,
is the use of small headings and titles throughout the paper in order to
signify a change in the subject as well as to provide more structure. While
Boyd used many italicized words in her piece, Carroll’s move is to include a
lot of parentheses. These parentheses serve a purpose of providing examples of
certain elements that she referred to in the text. This can be seen when she
says, “What we choose to wear (tennis shoes vs. flip flops), where we shop
(Whole Foods Market vs. Wal-Mart), what we eat (organic vs. fast food), or even
the way we send information (snail mail vs. text message) can work to persuade
others”. One move that both writers have in common, and for the same purpose,
is the use of rhetorical questions.
While there
are many different “moves” that each of these articles implemented, some of
them were more successful than the others. One particular move is how Janet
Boyd made her piece extremely conversational and personal. I feel as if this
provides for a very interesting and unique piece that teaches the reader the
concepts in a way that they may not normally be used to. Another particular
move that I feel was very successful, and that both of the authors used, is the
implementation of questions throughout the text. This allows for the reader to
be more engaged and involved by thinking on their own and attempting to apply
the concepts that they are learning. All in all, every writer has his or her
own moves that make him or her unique and different.
I thoroughly enjoyed your similes in the second paragraph...making moves while discussing moves! I appreciated your thorough analysis of just a few moves, rather than providing a shallow overview of several. I also really liked how you provided examples of what the writing WOULD HAVE sounded like, had the authors taken a different approach. This provided a solid comparison from which your readers could analyze the effect one approach would have had versus another.
ReplyDeleteI liked your introductory paragraph, I liked how you mentioned that the term “moves” is broad and you tried to narrow it to the how the authors in literature use their moves. You introduced the authors and their pieces really well and you also did great on introducing the differences between the two. You wrote down some good analysis on each of the two authors and their pieces. I know have a better understanding on what these two authors and their essays are trying to state, although I am a little bit concerned if you added too much analysis, especially in the paragraph where you talk about Janet Boyd and her essay. But overall, you did an excellent job. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteMajd,
ReplyDeleteI thought your PB2B was very thorough, and I especially like how you made use of textual examples to back up your claims. For instance (now I’m backing up my claim that you backed up your claims—wooooo!, you wrote “She floods her paper with uses of the words “I” and “You” in order to create a mood of personal connection” and she definitely does. Why? To create a more intimate, engaging experiencing for the reader. Her use of rhetorical questions to achieve this same effect is another example of her “moves.”
PB2A: “Check.”
PB2B: “Check plus.”
Grade for both PBs: 5/5
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